Al, this is wonderful, I'm running with him. The pace and his need to get away really takes over the reader. I agree with B, its poignant as it stands but more would be good too - but I'm greedy *g*. If you leave it like this then it would have to be GEN .
Very interested to see where you take it.
Hope that at 11:30 pm you're feeling better and sound asleep, unlike some...
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Date: 2001-07-26 03:41 pm (UTC)Very interested to see where you take it.
Hope that at 11:30 pm you're feeling better and sound asleep, unlike some...